TWO LOVERS. A man and a woman.
He loves her but it's not enough, he is too sad.
He takes a gun and shoots himself as she lies sleeping.
Leaves her to deal with feelings of guilt and emptiness.
She is crushed - is it my fault? What made him so sad?
Wasn't I enough for him?
"Gonna put my tender
heart in a blender..."
Now she's broken,
he can't mend her.
Comes too soon
and gone too fast ...
sounds like tomorrow
cannot last.
Look to shadows
in the corner,
what's that shape?
another mourner.
At the grave
a plea to save
what's come undone
with one small gun.
He took a chance
and took a shot
and now she's lost
what he forgot.
Her love, his life,
his hand did take
is it her fault?
was she awake?
Why such a sadness
in his heart?
And now she cries
she's torn apart.
Comes the grief
in disbelief
that he would leave
with no reprieve
for her.....
by Cathy S. Rapicano 3/27/08
15 comments:
I found this poem very thought provoking, it opens up a lot of different things to me, not sure if you are talking of a relationship, a friendship or a man and a woman.
It's about a man and woman, he shoots himself while she's sleeping, leaves her to deal with feelings of guilt. Something different. Thanks ((#))
What a sad poem. You are quite a talented poet. I enjoyed this, thanks for sharing it with us.
Lisa
What can I say Cathy, you've done it again! I hope it is just a wonderful beautiful tragic poem that came to mind, and not inspired by any personal circumstance. Hugs
~Rosemary
Nope Rosemary, honest it just wrote itself as I tapped it out. Except for the first line (in quotes) that's from a song. Don't know where this came from but not from a personal thing thank God. Strange feelings though...
Ooh what a great poem... loved the meter... it flowed so fast... dramatic!
be well,
Dawn
http://journals.aol.com/princesssaurora/CarpeDiem/
Powerful stuff Ms R.
Like Rosemary I wouldn't like to think it was as a result of personal circumstances.
Thank God the bloke shot himself as I though my goose was well and trully cooked and you were popping me or yourself off!
You should become a RAP star with that verse! Surprising as usual Ms R Love ED
WOW! Loved it! The ability to evoke feelings like that in so few words.....that is poetry. Keep on writing. Pat
Quite captivating! Anne
Wow, sad. xox
WOW!!!! SO SAD!!! Hey thanks for the web link you sent me... I love it!!! Sparklepeople.com
Thanks,
Joann
Beautiful and so heart rendering. Love Pam xx
Wow....... wow, wow wow.. Love it.
Gaz xx
That is so sad :o( ~ Ally x
Reminds me of that song "whiskey lullaby" ..-Missy http://journals.aol.com/ma24179/MISSYZSTUFF
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